About my curriculum vitae

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thD
Hello all, i m french and i m comming very soon to London, and i would like to have some help for making my curriculum vitae less mistakes!

Im asking myself about my employment sentences...

Feel free to reply.


XXX XXX Date of birth : XXX
[email protected] Nationality : French
[TEL REMOVED] Driver License : Yes
[ADDRESS REMOVED] Single

PERSONAL STATEMENT
I’m an experienced salesman with a wide range of experience within various domains looking for a new employment opportunity

EDUCATION
2006-2008 BACCALAUREAT PROFESSIONNEL DE COMMERCE
French equivalent to the Higher Leaving Certificate
2004-2006 BEP VENTE ACTION MARCHANDE
French equivalent to BTEC First Diploma

EMPLOYMENT

2011 GIFI (Salesperson in retail store)
AUCHAN (Temporary worker in French international retail group)
SAMSUNG 3D (Demonstrator for SAMSUNG 3D/Smart TV )
Tous au numérique (TV Technician)
Cash31 (Polyvalent salesperson in second-hand shop)
2010 ARELEC (Temporary worker in French magnetic solutions factory)
SONY 3D (Demonstrator for SONY 3D)
ISOA (Salesperson in insulation manufacturer)
The Phone House (Salesperson in multi-operator store)
2009 Le jardin des fleurs (Salesperson in botanical store)
Depan-Ordi (Independ ent sales and marketing person)
Courir (Salesperson in shoes store)
2008 Jules (Salesperson in clothing store)

Training period requested by the school

2007 Darty (Salesperson in multimedia and home appliances store)
Boulanger (Salesperson in multimedia and home appliances store)
Leroy Merlin (Salesperson in DIY store)
2006 Info-direct (Salesperson in computer store)
Coucquillou bureautique (Salesperson in office store)
Next Level Game (Salesperson in video game store)



[EDITED]
removed personal details :)

Thanks you admin, but it was falses exemples =D

[EDITED]

ahh I see :emb:
Posted: 2012-02-02 10:42:24
Gavalar
It looks like you've had quite a few jobs in quite a short space of time. I'd be tempted to leave out very short contract or temporary jobs and just focus on the main jobs you've had. Too many jobs in a short space of time can make employers think you're either not great at committing to a job or you are 'let go' quite quickly after starting the job for some reason.

Generally you should try to tailor the CV to the job you're going for, so bring out the parts of each job that are relevant to what you're going for.

I'm no CV expert but I've interviewed/employed people before and relevant skills, an eagerness to learn and the ability to fit in with a group of people were more important to me than anything else.

Good luck.
Posted: 2012-02-02 10:49:02
thD
Thanks you :)
Anyone for another comment ?

Does my sentences are corrects?
Posted: 2012-02-03 18:59:16
thD
up !!
Posted: 2012-02-05 19:53:52
Sooz
I would also say that you need fewer examples of jobs you've done (as it seems you've had so many an employer would worry you'll leave before the end of your first month!) and more examples of what you did/learnt within each employment. Employers like to see a teamplayer, someone who has new ideas for improvement/development (without being arrogant!) and someone who is professional.

I would also say that "Higher Leaving Certificate" is not something I'd recognise as a qualification - is it equivalent to an "A Level" instead?

Good luck!
Posted: 2012-02-06 12:31:40
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